Grandma, Grandpa, when can Brooke and I come over? I know you love us and all your grand kids, but you never call anymore.
You always wait for us to call you, and wait till we want to something. Always say " I miss you guys; we barely see each other; you guys need to come over more often; you guys never call us; we are never busy, you can come over whenever; I LOVE YOU GUYS!(:" If this is true, then how come you don't ever call to spend time with us or see how were doing.
Seriously, I know you love us but it's unfair we have to call you guys just to see or talk to you.
Don't be mad at me! Don't pretend this isn't true. Don't you even think for a second we just realized this, we've know this whole time. I love you guys top death, it 's just not fair that we have to do all the work to see you guys. I LOVE YOU, please don't be mad at me, but it's about time you guys start acting like grandparents and not like a stranger we met at the mall.
Good repition of the I love you's but just change the don'ts in the last paragraph. But overall good paper (:
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I like your repetition of "I love you" because it emphasizes your main point. I also like the repetition of "don't" in the first three lines of your final paragraph.
ReplyDeleteTo make this piece stronger, I would recommend rephrasing your last line so it has a stronger impact.