Friday, September 2, 2011
Eyes wide Open
When your in the hall ways, there's many things going on. When its dead silent, you can hear the footsteps slowly fade away into the darkness. Reminding you your not always alone. As the sun hits your skin, you have the feeling of warmth, and sunshine. The cool breeze that goes along with it gives you a nice relaxing feeling. Which together is a really amazing feeling. The chit chat from other classes always reminding you that your not alone.
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I love how you repeated the concept that "you are not alone" this excerpt gives me a good feeling and so does the writing over all. Your words flowed together, smoothly and effortlessly. Very well written :)
ReplyDeleteI love how this was a very positive piece of writing. Your words flowed smoothly and effortlessly...nice job
ReplyDeleteInteresting... we hadn't even begun the second person writing yet, and this was done completely in second person! Well done, this type of writing is usually pretty confusing (for me anyway ._.).
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